- Holos wrote:
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- Afif just said I write awfull
Oh no ..He doesn't mean I write awfull all the time.
He usually love the way I write and even ask me to rewrite all his writing in french ..I love playing with ideas and words...
By the way my french is quite elaborate: I do not double words in same sentence or same text.
I put my ideas one time.
In english as my vocabulary is limited, the same words keep poping.
Instead of emphasing and giving nuance I play parrot while my ideas are confused because I keep thinking in french and it's interfering...
So what Afif mean is I need to rewrite "Treatment" and make it less confuse...because it's currently quite long and he find I play parrot a lot on that page.(He show me I use "personnal again an again..I never do this in french I find synonym).
On the same time,reading on internet is not real confort.
Those who love me make the efforts (as you do will do efforts) but a customer who knows nothing about me and is simply looking for information may be flooded by my never ending words and can tent to lost himself....
I have to admit, I also think that anyone reading faults on the website may mix my expression level with the way I use flowers.
I am not so bad with flower but if anyone read 5 years old expressing , one may think "What help a child mind can bring me?"...
Something of this sort.
I know it might be quite inconscious but I do not need anything of this range to interfer.
I have done this web site on Nicole request.
She is the one allowing me to work at the Hale clinic.
So the website is part of her requirment for the contract.
She has yet put the Bach remedies in the
treatments, now available at the Hale clinicShe is the one in charge of the communication for the therapists with medias.
I really love what she writes.
I am so glad we did flowers together and for her love ones.
Each time I have saw her this has allow me to explain her what I do.
I try not to give too much information at one time and I am never sure of what will be remember.
I didn't understand why she was asking me sometimes some perticuliar questions...but when I read what she write I realise, it's help her to write what she has put on line.
So in fact she was not only a patient she was also working in order to be able to speak of the flowers with her own words.
In fact it's really cute to read back...what I explain in my clumsy way (she like the way I speak and didn't find it clumsy at all but really charming as you both) writen in a clear and concise way.
If I would have wanted to explain the same things..I would have take the double if not 3 times the amount of words (and in the lot..plenty not really usefull).
As those reading the website have no love for me, he thinks I must not rely on their compleasance and I will need to try my best for being irreprocheable.
And obvioulsy yesterday was not my best...
The website is supose to make them want to meet me...not to think I could not offer them anything else than an original way of talking.
So he is just cautious.
He knows I want everything to be as perfect as possible but as I am unable to write easily he just shows me where some texts on the web site are not the same level
- Holos wrote:
- But if you need feedback, there are too many ssss on progress!!
Ohhh!!! really??? Ok hi hi
- Holos wrote:
- Otherwise I think everything is wonderful. It just needs you to bring it to life.
Welcome back~
Sun Aug 17, 2008 7:08 pm
